Poetry | Posted by Jannie on 23 September 2008 @ 11:15 AM
i
She may be wearing a sweater
and fending off homeless men
while somewhere a college girl
is guiding tourists through caves
and talking bat guano
and somewhere else far far away
a sad but happy little old man
who lost everything and everyone
to the great tsunami
is about to throw an orchid out to sea.
The sun is shining and I feel a bit old.
But mostly young.
ii
In the oceans fish are doing what fish do,
oblivious to Freddie Mac and Fannie Mae et al.
I am in the quiet of my house.
I might listen to Rush Limbaugh.
I might clean the leaves out of the pool. Or not.
I will most certainly do my dishes, brush my teeth,
shower and put on the last of my sunscreen.
On 23 September 2008 at 12:42 pm Jae said,
Honey! You did it! Took some nerve to push that button, I bet, but here you are, ready for comments and feedback and untold adulation. Congratulations!!! xoxoxoxoxoxo
Your bud always…
On 23 September 2008 at 1:08 pm admin said,
Yes, Jae, I should’ve done it 2 years ago if I’d a known it would be this easy!
Livin’ and learnin’.
Lvove, Jannie
On 23 September 2008 at 8:38 pm Jae said,
Okay, but I must admit that I am on pins and porcupine quills awaiting the end of your final thought. “Put the last of my sunscreen…” In the trash? On the dog? In the first Halloween trick-or-treater’s plastic pumpkin? C’mon, don’t leave us hanging!
Smiles and smooches…
On 25 September 2008 at 12:17 am davidbdale said,
That’s really pretty, Jannie. It ends twice, both times beautifully. “The sun is shining and I feel a bit old” is such a perfect sentiment after the catalog it follows. I admire simple language that expresses complex thought. Thank you for this.
On 26 September 2008 at 12:26 pm Jae said,
I love the subtle (and not-so-subtle) changes, subtractions and additions that have appeared here every time I’ve read it. (Maybe you could post a Roman numeral after the title and increase it for each incarnation.) Those fishies, doin’ what fishies do!
Love you, schweetie!
On 26 September 2008 at 12:57 pm Jannie said,
Dearest Jae, you are sooooo correct — in fact earlier today I did just that- put in a small Roman numeral ii but didn’t quite make it to the first one, so here I go.
Wow, just got my first Google ads up. Ads and you! God must really love me extra today.
xoxoxoox
On 25 November 2008 at 3:56 pm Rhett said,
I liked it. Simple it was, and earthy.
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